Baolin, a very sensual and tasteful poem. Two minor points:
1. The reference to the "Grenn Light" led me to fathom you and she were in the same car, with one driving (probably you) and the other, being a passenger. But then your reference to a "desk" seems to repudiate that guess. A bit confusing there. You may want to clear it up.
2."Allows my eyes
To stay there longer decently"
Wouldn't "steadily" be better than "longer decently"?
The situation presents itself to you. You just happened to be at the "wrong" place at the "wrong" time. In my view, there's nothing indecent about it. :-D
Both offered good comments. Thank you. For Aihua: 1, "the green light 'used in a single line to hint that the green apple functions as a green light ( pay
attention to the last line in the fourth stanza.) If she were driving, she
couldn't play the apple; if the narrator were driving, he couldn't steadily
look at her body, so obviously it happens in a room. 2. " steadily" is better,
as it saves a word to make this line shorter. I may adopt your suggestion. You
are great!Thank you.
I'm not an expert in poems, but again I'm hardly an expert in anything. Baolin's poem has
raised my eyebrows.A lot of eyebrows. Good taste, good imagination and good linguistic
skills. That's the made of a good peot. The way to go. Baolin.