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    Both offered good comments. Thank you. For Aihua: 1, "the green light 'used in a single line to hint  that the green apple functions as a green light ( pay
    attention to the last line in the fourth stanza.) If she were driving, she
    couldn't play the apple; if the narrator were driving, he couldn't steadily
    look at her body, so obviously it happens in a room. 2. " steadily" is better,
    as it saves a word to make this line shorter. I may adopt your suggestion. You
    are great!Thank you.  
    baolin cheng
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